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If you can pick a superpower that you can have, what would it be and why?

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If I can pick a superpower that I can have, then, I will choose the ability that I could control other people's minds.
If I use it for the bad way, then, it will be a very serious crime, but I wanna use it for the good way.
And also I can do more things if I have the ability that I could control other people's minds.
Because of these reasons, I will choose the ability that I could control other people's minds if I can pick a superpower that I could have.

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Hi John:)

That's a great superpower. Think of all the possibilities with that. You will be an asset for everyone. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I can pick a superpower that I can have, then, I will choose the ability that I could control other people's minds.
>> If I can pick a superpower that I can have, then, I will choose the ability to read other people's minds. 

If I use it for the bad way, then, it will be a very serious crime, but I wanna use it for the good way.
>> Using it in a bad way is a serious crime but I want to use it for good things. 

And also I can do more things if I have the ability that I could control other people's minds.
>> Also, I can do a lot of things if I have this ability. 

Because of these reasons, I will choose the ability that I could control other people's minds if I can pick a superpower that I could have.
>> This is why I want to have a superpower that lets me read other people's minds. 
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