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What do you think is the best company to work at in your country and why?

I think "SAMSUNG" is the best company to work. Because it has a lot of workers who are competent in their work. And also they can help me not only work but also personal things. Because the process of entering "SAMSUNG" is very hard. So its workers are proven people as great workers.

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Hi Won:)

That's true. A lot of people dream of working in  Samsung. It's one of the world's leading company. It would be a privilege to work there. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think "SAMSUNG" is the best company to work. Because it has a lot of workers who are competent in their work. 
>> I think "SAMSUNG" is the best company to work at because it has a lot of workers who are competent in their field of work. 

And also they can help me not only work but also personal things.
>> And they can also help me, not only with work, but with personal things as well. 

 Because the process of entering "SAMSUNG" is very hard.
>> The process of entering "SAMSUNG" is very hard. 

So its workers are proven people as great workers.
>> So the workers in the company are proven to be great workers. 

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