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What is your idea of the best travel experience?

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My best travel experience was when I visited Busan with my friends. Because we don't have enough money, we had to take a subway and bus. I think this experience made us feel more surviving. We went to beach called Haewoondae, and it has a beautiful scenery.
Even if money was limited, we ate Busan's famous foods a lot. so It was so cool. We are poor girls, but we payed a lot to eat what we want.
Busan is a beautiful beach city. Also, It has lots of old buildings and history. You could watch a different aspect of Korean culture.

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Good Day Yun Su!
Thank you for sharing with me your amazing travel experience. Hope you can travel more and have experiences like this in the future.
-T. Caitlyn
My best travel experience was when I visited Busan with my friends. 
>>CORRECT
Because we don't have enough money, we had to take a subway and bus. 
>>OR: Because we have limited amount of money, we had to take the subway or the bus.
I think this experience made us feel more surviving. 
>>I think this experience is more like surviving.
We went to beach called Haewoondae, and it has a beautiful scenery.
>> We went to a beach called Haewoondae, and it has a beautiful scenery.
Even if money was limited, we ate Busan's famous foods a lot. 
>>Even though we have limited money, we were still able to eat Busan's famous food. 
so It was so cool. 
>>CORRECT
We are poor girls, but we payed a lot to eat what we want.
>>We maybe poor girls but we spent a lot just to eat what we want.
Busan is a beautiful beach city. 
>>CORRECT
Also, It has lots of old buildings and history. 
>>Also, It has a lot of old buildings and is full of history. 
You could watch a different aspect of Korean culture.
>>You could see a different aspect of the Korean culture.
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