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If you can pick a superpower that you can have, what would it be and why?

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If I can pick a superpower, I will pick a superpower not gaining weight because I like eating delicious foods, but it makes me gain weight. So, I can't eat delicious dishes without any worry. These are the reasons why I want to pick a superpower not gaining weight. If I can't pick a superpower not gaining weight, I will pick a superpower not being sleepy because when I do something, I can't concentrate on my tasks due to sleepiness.

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Hi Kimberly:)

Those are great ideas! I wish I have those too! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I can pick a superpower, I will pick a superpower not gaining weight because I like eating delicious foods, but it makes me gain weight. 
>> If I can pick a superpower, it will be the ability of not gaining weight because I like eating delicious food. It usually makes me gain weight. 

So, I can't eat delicious dishes without any worry. 
>> With this, I can eat delicious food without any worry. 

These are the reasons why I want to pick a superpower not gaining weight. 
>> These are the reasons why I want to pick this superpower. 

If I can't pick a superpower not gaining weight, I will pick a superpower not being sleepy because when I do something, I can't concentrate on my tasks due to sleepiness.
>> If not this one, I want to pick the ability of not sleeping when I am doing something important because I can't concentrate on my tasks because of it. 
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