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Hi, Andrea.

I'm always thanks to you.

Tomorrow is finally my rest day!

I've worked for 5days.

Most people work 5days though.

I don't want to say my work is harder than other's one.

Becuase we all work hard for our livings.

But in my case nomarlly if I work for 2 or 3days
I rest a day.

So working on for 5days wih out any restday means "you are dead." In my work place.

That's why I'm tired to day :(

And here there is one more reason.

Honestly I didn't prepare for the class.

I always prepare for our class at least 15 minutes before.

Today I didn't have enough time to do it.

I learned a lesson.

Make sure to prepare for the class.

I have something to say about The question I said..

I will try to ask you if I would not got lost.

Thank you for reading my homework^^

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Hi Q!^^ 

You are a great student. You always try your best to give a great answer and I appreciate that. 
Your pronunciation is also good. :) 
When it comes to sentence construction, you can even correct your own mistake. 
What I do is just o ask follow up questions so you can elaborate your answer. 

Keep it up!^^ 

Teacher Andrea 

Hi, Andrea.
>> Correct 

I'm always thanks to you.
>> I am always grateful to you. 

Tomorrow is finally my rest day!
>> Finally it's my rest day tomorrow! 

I've worked for 5days.
>> Correct 

Most people work 5days though.
>> Most people work for five days though. 

I don't want to say my work is harder than other's one. 
Becuase we all work hard for our livings.
>> I don't want to say that my homework is harder that other people's work because we all work hard to make a living. 

But in my case nomarlly if I work for 2 or 3days I rest a day.
>> But in my case, normally if I work for 2 or 3 days, I can have a rest day after. 

So working on for 5days wih out any restday means "you are dead." In my work place.
>> So working for five days without any rest means I am dead in my workplace. 

That's why I'm tired to day :(
>> Correct 

And here there is one more reason.
>> And there is one more reason.

Honestly I didn't prepare for the class.
>> Honestly, I didn't prepare for the class. 

I always prepare for our class at least 15 minutes before.
>> I always prepare 15 minutes before our class. 

Today I didn't have enough time to do it.
>> I didn't have time enough time to do it today. 

I learned a lesson. Make sure to prepare for the class.
>> I learnt a lesson today and that is to make sure to prepare for the class. 

I have something to say about The question I said..
>>  I have something to say about the question that I've told you... 

I will try to ask you if I would not got lost.
>> I will try to ask you if I would not got lost.  

Thank you for reading my homework. ^^
>> Correct 
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