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What is your favorite English movie and why?

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My favorite English movie is Avengers: Endgame because I like heroes movies. They protect the world and do their best to make us live in better place. When I watch a hero movie, I get power to live more hard. It is the reason why I like heroes movies. Of course, these are fiction movies, but through these, I can think about the world's future. I can have my head in the cloud. Sometimes, due to these thoughts, I think about so many things. It doesn't make me concentrate on my tasks, but when I think about useless things, I can get rid of thoughts about them.

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Hi Kimberly:)

That's my favorite too! Marvel movies are the best. They make  us feel so much emotions and they are very inspiring as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My favorite English movie is Avengers: Endgame because I like heroes movies. 
>> My favorite English movie is the "Avengers: Endgame" because I like heroes movies. 

They protect the world and do their best to make us live in better place. 
>> CORRECT

When I watch a hero movie, I get power to live more hard. 
>> When I watch a hero movie, it motivates me to live harder. 

It is the reason why I like heroes movies. 
>> It is the reason why I like hero movies. 

Of course, these are fiction movies, but through these, I can think about the world's future. 
>> CORRECT

I can have my head in the cloud. 
>> It feels like my head is on the clouds. 

Sometimes, due to these thoughts, I think about so many things. 
>> CORRECT

It doesn't make me concentrate on my tasks, but when I think about useless things, I can get rid of thoughts about them.
>> CORRECT
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