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Do you think marriage is important? Why or why not?

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I think it's not important in generation now. The times have changed and there are a lot of things to bear If I get married. I don't think welfare is that good in South Korea. But the dating is important. Anyway, Thank you for sharing the video. Dr.dre and Eminem are still cool~~~~

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Hi Elic:)

Yes, marriage is not that important nowadays because everyone is already doing what married couples do already. Although for some people, it's still important and sacred. 

PS: No worries! It was indeed very cool. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think it's not important in generation now. 
>> I think it's not important in the generation now. 

The times have changed and there are a lot of things to bear If I get married. 
>> The times have changed and there are a lot of things to bear if I get married. 

I don't think welfare is that good in South Korea. 
>> I don't think that the welfare in South Korea is good. 

But the dating is important.
>> But dating is still important. 

 Anyway, Thank you for sharing the video. Dr.dre and Eminem are still cool
>> Anyways, thank you for sharing the video of Dr. Dre and Eminem. It was so cool. 
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