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They say exercise helps improve mood. How? Write at least 5 sentences on how exercising can improve one's mood or feelings.

First, if you exercise a lot, your body will make andorpin, which is let person happier than before. This feeling can helpful when you need to think creative things.
Second, you may get routine. Having a routine can make you have a balanced life. Regular exercise is difficult to keep on, so if you stay this routine like exercising, you can feel happier and braver.
For example, When I was in Korea, I usually do running. After Running about 30 minutes, I can feel my andorpin is running.

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They say exercise helps improve mood. How? 
>>CORRECT
Write at least 5 sentences on how exercising can improve one's mood or feelings.
>>CORRECT
First, if you exercise a lot, your body will make andorpin, which is let person happier than before.
>>First, If you exercise, your body produces endorphins which makes a person happier than before.
This feeling can helpful when you need to think creative things.
>>This feeling is helpful when you want to be creative.
Second, you may get routine.
>>Second, you can make a routine.
Having a routine can make you have a balanced life.
>>Having a routine can balance your life.
Regular exercise is difficult to keep on, so if you stay this routine like exercising, you can feel happier and braver.
>>Exercising regularly is difficult but having a routine can help you and make you feel happier and braver.
For example, When I was in Korea, I usually do running.
>>For example, when I was in Korea, I usually go for runs.
After Running about 30 minutes, I can feel my andorpin is running.
>>After running for about 30 minutes, I can tell that endorphins are released because I feel happier and better.
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