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When I take a rest very long time, I feel so lazy.
But I don't like that feel really.
I am very diligent person.
Sometimes busy season, I was take a rest at home 2day because I was sick my condition is so bad.
But I was so anxiety, I think I should go to work.
And that's why I take a long rest time after,
I'll going to be work now

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Hi Ann:)

Me too! I feel very uncomfortable when I am not working. It feels like I'm useless. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

When I take a rest very long time, I feel so lazy.
>> When I take a rest for a very long time, I feel so lazy.

But I don't like that feel really.
>> I don't like that feeling. 

I am very diligent person.
>> I am a very diligent person.

Sometimes busy season, I was take a rest at home 2day because I was sick my condition is so bad.
>> There are times that I am busy. I took a rest at home last time for 2 days because my condition was not good.  

But I was so anxiety, I think I should go to work.
>> But I was so anxious at that time. I was thinking of going to work. 

And that's why I take a long rest time after,
>> That's why I take long rests after. 

I'll going to be work now
>> CORRECT
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