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Do you think it\\\'s healthy to eat out often? Why or why not?

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Do you think it\'s healthy to eat out often? Why or why not?

I think eating out is not healthy. If you are not good at cooking, eating out can be another way, however, If you eat out very often, It could be unhealty to your body.
Because restuarant's foods are made very quickly and sometimes carlories are much higher than cooking at home(the one at home), It can make you gain more weight.
Eating out is very convenient. But, for keeping your body healthy, we need to control the times of eating out.

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Hi, Yun Su! 
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree with you, eating out is okay but if we do it often, it can be very unhealthy. Great Job in expressing your thoughts on this topic.
-T. Caitlyn
Do you think it's healthy to eat out often? Why or why not?
>>CORRECT
I think eating out is not healthy. 
>>CORRECT
If you are not good at cooking, eating out can be another way, 
>>If  you are not good at cooking, eating out can be a better option.
however, If you eat out very often, It could be unhealty to your body. Because restuarant's foods are made very quickly and sometimes carlories are much higher than cooking at home(the one at home), 
>>However, eating out too often can be unhealthy because food from the restaurants are made quickly and sometimes has much more calories than the food we cook at home.
It can make you gain more weight.
>>CORRECT
Eating out is very convenient.
>>CORRECT
But, for keeping your body healthy, we need to control the times of eating out.
>>But if we want to keep our bodies healthy, we need to limit the times we eat out.
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