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I don't know how to love someone unique expression way.
But I think best expression is just no talk only hug.
Hug is the best expression way.
When I very hard my mind or tired, my parents usually do that.
And it's makes feel so comfortable and relax.
Hug is best motion.

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Hi Ann:)

Hugging makes us calm down all the time. Your parents are very sweet by the way. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't know how to love someone unique expression way.
>> I don't know how to uniquely show my love to someone. 

But I think best expression is just no talk only hug.
>>  But I think that the best way is to just hug and not talk. 

Hug is the best expression way.
>> Hugging is the best way to show your love for someone. 

When I very hard my mind or tired, my parents usually do that.
>> When I fee down or tired, my parents usually hug me. 

And it's makes feel so comfortable and relax.
>> It makes me feel so comfortable and relaxed. 

Hug is best motion.
>> CORRECT
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