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What is one unique way we can show our love to other people?

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I don't think about unique way. It's okay as long as we express it well. You like it when it's good and you're happy when it's happy. But the best present is money. hahaha

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Hi Elic:)

Hahahaha! That's true. Money is the best gift of all. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon
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I don't think about unique way. 
>> I can't about a unique way. 

It's okay as long as we express it well. 
>> CORRECT

You like it when it's good and you're happy when it's happy. 
>> You like it when it's good and when it makes you happy. 

But the best present is money. hahaha
>> But the best present for me is money. Hahaha!
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