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What is that one thing that you will not change about yourself and why?

I think everything will be changed. and i can not ensure the change in the future.

I just believe my hair will not change. i had dream before that i had hair loss. after that dream, my feeling was really bad during all day.

About the personality , i think i should change to better one. i'm not live alone. i always live with co-workers or family.

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Hi Logan:)

Yes, change is inevitable. It's the only thing that is constant in our lives. We just have to adapt to it. 

PS: Your dream made me laugh. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think everything will be changed. and i can not ensure the change in the future.
>> I think everything will change and we can't ensure the changes in the future. 

I just believe my hair will not change.
>> I just believe that  my hair will not change.

 i had dream before that i had hair loss. 
>> I had a dream before that I lost all of my hair. 

after that dream, my feeling was really bad during all day.
>> After that, I felt really bad the entire day. 

About the personality , i think i should change to better one.
>> About my personality, I think I should change it to a better one. 

 i'm not live alone. 
>> I don't live alone. 

i always live with co-workers or family.
>> I always live with my co-worker and family. 
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