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If you can move to another country, which one would you pick and why?

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If you can move to another country, which one would you pick and why?

If I can move to another country, I would like to go to Australia or New Zealand.
I don't have a special reason to live there, I just think Australia is a natural place.
It has good air and beautiful natural scenery.
If I live there, my body and mind will be healthy.

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Hi Monica:)

Those are actually good countries. It's so peaceful to live there. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I can move to another country, I would like to go to Australia or New Zealand.
>>CORRECT

I don't have a special reason to live there, I just think Australia is a natural place.
>> I don't have a special reason to live there. I just think that Australia is a natural place.

It has good air and beautiful natural scenery.
>> The air there is good and it has beautiful sceneries. 

If I live there, my body and mind will be healthy.
>> CORRECT
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