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What is the worst news you\'ve ever heard in South Korea? Explain in detail.

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The worst news is a person who visited to my home had COVID-19. When I heard this news, I was shocked. Anyway, at that time, I couldn't go to my academy. Instead of going to there, I had to go to the testing clinic. Also, I had to be tested for COVID-19. It was bad news, but it was new experience. Also, through it, I realized that I have to do my best not to have COVID-19. I hope that ordinary life comes back.

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Hi Kimberly :)

Oh, no! I hope you're doing okay. I heard that the number of COVID-19 cases are really high nowadays. Keep safe always!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

The worst news is a person who visited to my home had COVID-19. 
>> The worst news that I have heard is when a person that visited my house was positive for COVID-19. 

When I heard this news, I was shocked. 
>> CORRECT

Anyway, at that time, I couldn't go to my academy. 
>> CORRECT

Instead of going to there, I had to go to the testing clinic. 
>> CORRECT

Also, I had to be tested for COVID-19. 
>> CORRECT

It was bad news, but it was new experience. 
>> Even though it was a bad news, it was  still a new experience. 

Also, through it, I realized that I have to do my best not to have COVID-19. 
>> CORRECT

I hope that ordinary life comes back.
>> I hope that we can go back to our ordinary lives. 

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