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What is your greatest achievement as a student and why?

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In my opinion, my greatest achievement as a student is finding my own life.
Many people may think that the most important purpose of students is study.
But the purpose of study is searching our own lives, and living our own lives.
But students can't live their own lives yet because they need to be took care by their parents.
So I think the biggest achievement of students is study.
And also I am a student, so I think my greatest purpose as a student is discovering my interests, and being ready for my own life.

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Hi John:)

That's a good way to see the life ahead of us. You have a very positive perspective. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my opinion, my greatest achievement as a student is finding my own life.
>> CORRECT

Many people may think that the most important purpose of students is study.]
>> Many people may think that the most important purpose of a students is to study. 

But the purpose of study is searching our own lives, and living our own lives.
>> But the purpose of studying is to search our purpose in life and live it well. 

But students can't live their own lives yet because they need to be took care by their parents.
>> But students can't live their own lives yet because they need to be taken care of their parents. 

So I think the biggest achievement of students is study.
>> So, I think the biggest achievement of students is studying.

And also I am a student, so I think my greatest purpose as a student is discovering my interests, and being ready for my own life.
>> I am also a student so I think that my greatest purpose is to discover my interests and be ready for the future. 
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