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Writing Task (Feb 8th, 2022)

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What animals do you think are scary for you?
>>Ironically, at the moment, it¡¯s a dog. No matter how big a dog is, I think the innate instinct of dog is wild. I may have seen and heard of a lot of news about the casualties being bitten by ferocious dogs and that is the reason why I am so scared of dogs, especially of big ones. Exactly speaking, I don¡¯t wanna be ¡°with dogs¡±. I like dogs on TV, though. And, interestingly, so do my wife and my daughter. Whenever we happen to see a big dog while walking on the street together, we step aside from the dog right away and try to find another route to take a detour. All of the owners of big dogs must put a mouth cover around the mouth of the dogs and leash the dogs. Or they¡¯ll be fined here in Korea.
Oh, and another one, which is a pigeon. When I was a kid, I watch the film, ¡°Home, Alone¡±, alone at home. And I was really horrified watching the scene in which flocks of pigeons gather to eat bird feed distributed by an old woman.

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Hi, U Seong! 

Oh, I do understand that. It's pretty hard to raise a dog. You must be very diligent and be patient. You must really learn to how train them properly or they may harm you or the other people. As for pigeons, well, I'm also not a big fan of birds. 

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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Ironically, at the moment, it¡¯s a dog. 
>> Correct! 
No matter how big a dog is, I think the innate instinct of dog is wild. 
>>No matter how big a dog is, I think the innate instinct of a dog is wild. 
I may have seen and heard of a lot of news about the casualties being bitten by ferocious dogs and that is the reason why I am so scared of dogs, especially of big ones. 
>> Correct!
Exactly speaking, I don¡¯t wanna be ¡°with dogs¡±. 
>> Correct!
I like dogs on TV, though. And, interestingly, so do my wife and my daughter. 
>> Correct!
Whenever we happen to see a big dog while walking on the street together, we step aside from the dog right away and try to find another route to take a detour. 
>> Correct!
All of the owners of big dogs must put a mouth cover around the mouth of the dogs and leash the dogs. Or they¡¯ll be fined here in Korea.
>> Correct!
Oh, and another one, which is a pigeon. 
>> Correct!
When I was a kid, I watch the film, ¡°Home, Alone¡±, alone at home. 
>> Correct!
And I was really horrified watching the scene in which flocks of pigeons gather to eat bird feed distributed by an old woman.
>> Correct!
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