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If you can move to another country, which one would you pick and why?

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If I can move to another country, I will move to America because a language which I can speak is English and Korean. Of course, I'm not enough. So, to talk with someone in English, I want to learn English more deeply. In fact, Moving to another country is good, but I want to live in Korea and travel to another country for experiencing other countries' cultures because I think that visiting different countries is better than moving to another country.

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Hi Kimberly:)

I agree with you because there is no place like home. We can visit other places to gain experiences but it is nice to go home to the place that we know best. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I can move to another country, I will move to America because a language which I can speak is English and Korean. 
>> If I can move to another country, I will move to America because the languages that I can speak is Korean and English. 

Of course, I'm not enough. 
>> Of course, I'm not that fluent. 

So, to talk with someone in English, I want to learn English more deeply. 
>> So if I want to talk to someone in English, I need to be more fluent in it. 

In fact, Moving to another country is good, but I want to live in Korea and travel to another country for experiencing other countries' cultures because I think that visiting different countries is better than moving to another country.
>>In fact, moving to another country is good, but I want to live in Korea and travel to another country to experience different cultures. I think visiting is better than moving to another country. 
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