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How would you describe the difference between a vice and an addiction? Can they be the same thing or

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I think an addiction is a subordinate thing of a vice. That mean an addiction is a kind of vices. I insist on that a vice has a comprehensive meaning. It could be a crime, smoking and even an addiction. Also, the meaning of vices is extremely subjective. We cannot define a vice because It depends on the people's taste. If the behavior benefit them, they wouldn't regard that as a vice unquestioningly. On the contrary, if it harm them, they would say that this is a vice although it is a something righteous. Anyway, my answer of the first question is that an addiction is a part of vices and naturally, the second question(Can they be the same thing?) is solved. Lastly, I think there are a few people who are addicted to their vices. They are rare but they definitely exist. We call them lunatics. I hope that there are no people like that among my friends and family

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Hello Kevin!
Thanks for explaining the differences between the two.   Take note of your punctuation marks in writing.  Keep on using the vocabulary you have learned from your self-study time. ^^

~T. Maine

I think an addiction is a subordinate thing of a vice. 
>>I think addiction is a subordinate of a vice. 
That mean an addiction is a kind of vices. 
>>That means addiction is a kind of vice.
I insist on that a vice has a comprehensive meaning. 
>>I insist that vice has a comprehensive meaning. 
It could be a crime, smoking and even an addiction. 
>>It could be a crime and even an addiction. 
Also, the meaning of vices is extremely subjective. 
>>In addition, the meaning of vices is extremely subjective. 
We cannot define a vice because It depends on the people's taste. 
>>We cannot define a vice because it depends on people's tastes. 
If the behavior benefit them, they wouldn't regard that as a vice unquestioningly. 
>>If their behavior benefits them, they wouldn't regard that as a vice unquestioningly. 
On the contrary, if it harm them, they would say that this is a vice although it is a something righteous. 
>>On the contrary, if it harms them, they would say that it's a vice although it is something righteous. 
Anyway, my answer of the first question is that an addiction is a part of vices and naturally, the second question(Can they be the same thing?) is solved. 
>>Anyway, my answer to this first question is that addiction is a part of vices, and naturally the second query is solved. 
Lastly, I think there are a few people who are addicted to their vices.
>>Correct. 
 They are rare but they definitely exist. 
>>Correct. 
We call them lunatics. 
>>Correct. 
I hope that there are no people like that among my friends and family
>>I hope there are no people like that among my family and friends. 
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