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LIving WIth Someone

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I think living with someone is better than living alone. It can be more fun living with someon than living alone, because we can play, talk together, spend our time together when we live with someone. However it can be very boring when we live alone. Also we can easily be depressed when we live alone.

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Hi Alex:)

That's true. It's more comforting to live with another person. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think living with someone is better than living alone. 
>> CORRECT

It can be more fun living with someon than living alone, because we can play, talk together, spend our time together when we live with someone.
>> It can be more fun living with someone than living alone because we can play, talk together and spend our time together.

 However it can be very boring when we live alone. 
>> On the other hand, it can be very boring when we live alone. 

Also we can easily be depressed when we live alone.
>> Also, we can easily be depressed when we live alone. 
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