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What did you do on Seollal (¼³³¯) ?

We gathered at my husband's elder brother's house. He is first son in the family. Especially, My husband's brother's wife's mother came to here. She prayed for us in the meeting. It is nice to pray in my family in law whenever Korean's holiday's meeting. Actually, that\'s why I married with my husband.
For spending a good time, we are supposed to prepare for meal like making a lot of food. So we make some japchae, Korea style pancakes, and sweet rice drink, so on. Fortunetly, my brother's wife in law is perfect when it comes to cooking. And She is good at cooking and my mother's in law likes, too. Also we have a lot of members than other family members. So it is not easy to prepare meals including doing the dishes. But I want to give our children a happy memory and a feeling a sense of belonging. I hope that they get along with each other.

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Miss Rachel!

Thank you for sharing what you did during the holidays! I'm glad that you did a lot of stuff and met a lot of people. It is also so lovely that you had your son's feelings in mind. 
There were some corrections here, and I hope you can check them. If you have any questions, you can ask about them in class.

Great job!
-Teacher Violet.

We gathered at my husband's elder brother's house. 
>> CORRECT!

He is first son in the family. 
>> CORRECT!

Especially, My husband's brother's wife's mother came to here. 
>> Especially, my husband's brother's wife's mother came here.

She prayed for us in the meeting.
>> CORRECT!

It is nice to pray in my family in law whenever Korean's holiday's meeting. 
>> It is nice to pray with my family in law whenever there is a gathering/meeting on Korean holidays.

Actually, that\'s why I married with my husband.
>> Actually, that's why I married my husband.

For spending a good time, we are supposed to prepare for meal like making a lot of food. So we make some japchae, Korea style pancakes, and sweet rice drink, so on. 
>>To have a good time, we were supposed to prepare a lot of food, so we made some japchae, Korean style pancakes, sweet rice drink, and so on. 

Fortunetly, my brother's wife in law is perfect when it comes to cooking. And She is good at cooking and my mother's in law likes, too. 
>>(Do you mean...) Fortunately, my brother's wife is perfect when it comes to cooking and my mother's in law likes it too. 

Also we have a lot of members than other family members. So it is not easy to prepare meals including doing the dishes. But I want to give our children a happy memory and a feeling a sense of belonging. 
>> Also, we have a lot of members than most families so it is not easy to prepare meals and doing the dishes but I want to give our children a happy memory and a sense of belonging. 

I hope that they get along with each other.
>> CORRECT!

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