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What is your favorite tradition in South Korea? Explain your answer.

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My favorite tradition in South Korea is the tradition that we get money in the new year.
Because in the new year, we get money.
And we can do many things with the money.
So I like the tradition that we get money in the new year.

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Hi John:)

That really is a great tradition.  ^^

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My favorite tradition in South Korea is the tradition that we get money in the new year.
>> My favorite tradition in South Korea is receiving money during Seollal. 

Because in the new year, we get money.
>> It is because we usually receive some money during new year. 

And we can do many things with the money.
>> We can do many things with that money. 

So I like the tradition that we get money in the new 
year.
>> This is why I like this tradition. 

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