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Essay (Jan 28th, 2022)

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I'm so sorry to hear your trouble. Hasn't anyone got hurt? I hope no one has. And I really hope your house gets fixed soon, too. I totally understand your situation, so don't ever worry about me! I'm always on your side and always will be! (It's just like.. we have known each other for a long time ^^)

>>For me, following my own dreams is more important. I might have told you this. "I cannot teach my daughter something using my mouse. She will only learn from my behavior, how I react to the situation in trouble, how I choose to act in certain situations". I want to tell her to find what she really wants to do in her life. To find out what she wants to do, she will have to have as many experiences as possible. And to have many experiences, she has to have the courage to do what she wants, no matter what people say. I want to tell her "Do what you want at any time because I've been doing what I want. If you hesitate and choose not to do, you'll regret for not doing it"

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Hi, U Seung! 

We are all fine, nobody got hurt. Thank you so much for understanding and for your kindness. We have already fixed the house and I got a nice and comfortable place now to sleep and work. I will be talking to you later. ^_^

That's actually a good mindset! I think your daughter is very lucky to have a very understanding father and who has full of wisdom. It is true, that we need our parents' guidance, but we should not forget what our hearts really desire. If ever we fail, we can still try again. Let's always remember to TRY AND TRY UNTIL WE SUCCEED!

THANK YOU SO MUCH AND HAVE A GREAT DAY AHEAD!
SEE YOU :)

~T. ROANNE ^_^
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For me, following my own dreams is more important.
>> Correct! 
I might have told you this. "I cannot teach my daughter something using my mouse. 
>> Correct! 
She will only learn from my behavior, how I react to the situation in trouble, how I choose to act in certain situations". 
>> Correct! 
I want to tell her to find what she really wants to do in her life. 
>> Correct! 
To find out what she wants to do, she will have to have as many experiences as possible. 
>> Correct! 
And to have many experiences, she has to have the courage to do what she wants, no matter what people say. 
>> Correct! 
I want to tell her "Do what you want at any time because I've been doing what I want. 
>> Correct! 
If you hesitate and choose not to do, you'll regret for not doing it"
>> Correct! 
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