¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What is your favorite tradition in South Korea?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Ȳ*º°
2022-01-28 276

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

My favorite tradition is expressing my thanks to others because through it, I can make a friend more easily. Due to it is a tradition, it is one of my habits.  So, when I'm thankful to others, I can express my thanks to them. Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called "ondol" because through using it, I can stay at my home more warmly. Maybe, there is it in all Korean house. So, on the winter season, most of Koreans lie down and eat tangerines. It is the best moment on a day.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Kimberly :)

That's a very interesting tradition. I  wish we also had winter season here in the Philippines. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My favorite tradition is expressing my thanks to others because through it, I can make a friend more easily. 
>> CORRECT

Due to it is a tradition, it is one of my habits.  
>> Due to this tradition, it has became my habit as well. 

So, when I'm thankful to others, I can express my thanks to them. 
>> So when I am thankful to others, I express it to them. 

Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called "ondol" because through using it, I can stay at my home more warmly. 
>> Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called "ondol" because I can stay warm at my home. 

Maybe, there is it in all Korean house. 
>> All Korean homes have this. 

So, on the winter season, most of Koreans lie down and eat tangerines. 
>> So during the winter season, most Korean lie down on the floor and eat tangerines. 

It is the best moment on a day.
>>It is the best moment of the day. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
115827 1. What are the things that make you happy? 2. What are the... ¾ö*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 129
115826 homework Á¤*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 1126
115825 Homework ¿À*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 742
115824 I have but now it\'s change ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 730
115823 Am I right track?! ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 670
115822 Essay (Jan 21th, 2022) ³²*½Â ¿Ï·á 2022-01-23 558
115821 Does anyone famous come from your hometown? ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 382
115820 Claire\'s Homework ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 383
115819 Places with Contents ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 534
115818 What do you think is the biggest change in how families are in... ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 690
115817 Have you ever left discrimination from other people before? How... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 731
115816 If a book has been made into a movie, which do you prefer to do... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 284
115815 Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 390
115814 Have you ever felt discrimination from other people before? How... ±è*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 1
115813 What do you think is your main purpose in life? ±è*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-22 1
115812 If a book has been made into a movie, which do you prefer to do... ±è*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-01-21 0
115811 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-21 1240
115810 Do you like meeting new people? ¹®*Çý ¿Ï·á 2022-01-21 2
115809 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-01-21 641
115808 Have you ever felt discrimination from other people before? How... Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-01-21 354

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04