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Who is the best and worst president of South Korea? Explain why.

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In my opinion, the best president of South Korea was Mr. Roh.
He was a layer of South Korea even though he didn't graduate the university.
But he valued justice and he joined to many campaigns.
And he tried to manage the country better than before.
So I think he is the best president of South Korea.
But I can't choose the worst president of South Korea.
Because many presidents of South Korea went to the prison because of their fault.
Even some presidents did dictatorship.
So I can't choose who is the worst president of South Korea.

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Hi John :)

Wow, I didn't know that about the government history of South Korea. Thanks for sharing! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my opinion, the best president of South Korea was Mr. Roh.
>> In my opinion, the best president of South Korea was President Roh. 

He was a layer of South Korea even though he didn't graduate the university.
>> He was a lawyer in South Korea even if he didn't graduate in a university. 

But he valued justice and he joined to many campaigns.
>> He valued justice and joined many campaigns. 

And he tried to manage the country better than before.
>> He also tried to manage the country better than before. 

So I think he is the best president of South Korea.
>> So I think that he is the best president of South Korea.

But I can't choose the worst president of South Korea.
>> On the other hand, I can't choose who the worst president is in South Korea. 

Because many presidents of South Korea went to the prison because of their fault.
>> It is because there are many presidents who went to prison due to crime. 

Even some presidents did dictatorship.
>> There are some that did dictatorship. 

So I can't choose who is the worst president of South Korea.
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