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Attitude before Argument

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I think It is good to argue for sometimes, and good to ignore on the other times.
We will not going to make any difference in situation if we know nothing, and there will be no difference when we ignore those either.
You could say the one who argue can get something, but it's too ideal. We can do more things instead of arguing.
I think the key point of this delema is 'attitude'.
We should know that our own idea can also be wrong, and be an open-minded person.

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Hello Justine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think It is good to argue for sometimes, and good to ignore on the other times.

>> I think it is good to argue sometimes, and it's also good to ignore it on other times.
We will not going to make any difference in situation if we know nothing, and there will be no difference when we ignore those either.

>> We will not be making any difference in a situation if we know nothing, and there will be no difference when we ignore it either.
You could say the one who argue can get something, but it's too ideal. 

>> You could say the one who argues can get something, but it's too ideal. 

We can do more things instead of arguing.

>> CORRECT!
I think the key point of this delema is 'attitude'.

>> I think the key point of this dilemma is 'attitude'.
We should know that our own idea can also be wrong, and be an open-minded person.

>> We should know that our own idea can also be wrong, and be an open-minded person.

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