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What is the best memory you have of your family doing something together?
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Maybe, that moment would be right now, at the moment, right after we got the text message a few minutes ago that said we all had negative results of COVID 19. I¡¯m quite sure that we would talk about those moments, reminiscing when we were under quarantine, the worst moment, and when we were notified that we were not infected, the happiest moment.
Before when I mentioned above, the birth of my daughter is definitely the most precious moment. My wife and I were sleeping and it was 2 o¡¯clock in November 2017. And my wife woke me up, touching me by the hand and the shoulder. Embarrassed and not waking up completely, I pressed the wrong number, 114, instead of 119. Anyway, thankfully, we got the maturnitiy hospital in time. And not for long after, I could hear my junior crying. Did I cry too? Yes. of course, I did more than you can imagine.

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Hi, U Seung! 

Oh, Those are indeed wonderful moments that you can treasure and share to your daughter once she grows up and can fully understand everything. Also, I'm happy to hear that you got the negative results. That's indeed a great news!

Thank you for sharing and talk to you later~ ^_^

~T. Roanne ^_^
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Maybe, that moment would be right now, at the moment, right after we got the text message a few minutes ago that said we all had negative results of COVID 19. 
>> Correct! 
I¡¯m quite sure that we would talk about those moments, reminiscing when we were under quarantine, the worst moment, and when we were notified that we were not infected, the happiest moment.
>> Correct! 
Before when I mentioned above, the birth of my daughter is definitely the most precious moment. 
>> Before what I mentioned above, the birth of my daughter is definitely the most precious moment.  
My wife and I were sleeping and it was 2 o¡¯clock in November 2017. 
>> My wife and I were sleeping and it was 2 o¡¯clock on November 2017. 
And my wife woke me up, touching me by the hand and the shoulder.
>> Correct! 
Embarrassed and not waking up completely, I pressed the wrong number, 114, instead of 119. Anyway, thankfully, we got the maturnitiy hospital in time. 
>> Embarrassed and not waking up completely, I pressed the wrong number, 114, instead of 119. Anyway, thankfully, we got to the maternity hospital in time.  
And not for long after, I could hear my junior crying. 
>> Correct! 
Did I cry too? Yes. of course, I did more than you can imagine.
>> Did I cry too? Yes, Of course, I did more than you can imagine.
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