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Q:Tell me about some good places to hang out.
A:For me, most of the places are good places to hang out.
When I hang out with my friends, we usually play boardgames at home or look about some animals in our town.
So without some places that doesn't have any animals, it's good place to hang out.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


For me, most of the places are good places to hang out.

>> For me, most places are good places to hang out.
When I hang out with my friends, we usually play boardgames at home or look about some animals in our town.

>> When I hang out with my friends, we usually play board games at home or look for some animals in our town.
So without some places that doesn't have any animals, it's good place to hang out.

>> Places that don't have any animals are good places to hang out.

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