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Why kids are not should be read news.

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I think ids are not should be read as a piece of news.
That is because kids are not to be read the news.
My second reason is it is boring to read the news.
My third reason is it is hard to unscramble the news's lesson.
Finally, news lesson something is very harmful to kids.

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Hello, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. You were able to answer the question. Awesome! However, you have to be careful with sentence construction. Please take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie


I think ids are not should be read as a piece of news.
>> I think kids should not read the news.

That is because kids are not to be read the news.
>> There's no need to write this. It's the same as the first sentence.


My second reason is it is boring to read the news.
>> It is because reading the news is boring.

My third reason is it is hard to unscramble the news's lesson.
>> Moreover, it is hard to understand.

Finally, news lesson something is very harmful to kids.
>> It can also be very harmful to kids.
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