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Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?

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I don't think that having a lot of money can make I happy. Even though I haven't enough money, I feel happiness in small things. and the happiness depend on my mind. But there's a quote in South Korea. Money can't buy happiness, but there's nothing like that. :)

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Hi Hyeon:) 

That's true. Money is a big aspect in our lives but it is not the only thing that keeps us alive and happy. We should be contented with other things as well that brings us happiness. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't think that having a lot of money can make I happy. 
>> I don't think that having a lot of money can make me happy. 

Even though I haven't enough money, I feel happiness in small things. and the happiness depend on my mind. 
>> Even though I don't have enough money, I still feel happiness from small things. Happiness depends on our state of mind. 

But there's a quote in South Korea. 
>> But there's a quote in South Korea, Money can't buy happiness, but there's nothing like it. 

Money can't buy happiness, but there's nothing like that. :)
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