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What do you think is your main purpose in life?

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I would have to say that It's overcoming something like adversity, suffering and hardship. The main purpose should grow up by overcoming it. :)

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Hi Hyeon:) 

At some point, you are right. We are not given any purpose when we first existed in this world. We are the ones in control of our faith. In order for us to see our main purpose, we have to overcome some hardships first. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

 I would have to say that It's overcoming something like adversity, suffering and hardship. 
>>  I would have to say that my purpose in life is  overcoming something like adversity, suffering and hardship. 

The main purpose should grow up by overcoming it. :)
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