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Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?

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Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?

I think that I'm happier than having no money.
But Happiness doesn't come from money.
For making a lot of money, people give up their happiness.
It would depend on what I want to choose.

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Hi Monica:) 

That's true. Money is a big aspect in our lives but it is not the only thing that keeps us alive. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think that I'm happier than having no money.
>> I think I'm happier with having money but happiness doesn't come from money. 

But Happiness doesn't come from money.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

For making a lot of money, people give up their happiness.
>> People sometimes give up their happiness just to earn money. 

It would depend on what I want to choose.
>> It will depend on what I want to choose. 
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