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In many cultures, women cook more often than men. Why is this?

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Traditionally, cooking is considered a women's job rather than a men's one. From prehistoric times, work must have been divided according to gender. When men went out to hunt game, women who waited for men inside the cave might prepare for meals. These role allocations may have been passed down by educating their children, and this division of roles has been gradually getting stronger and stronger as time goes by. This could be one of the explanations for why women cook more than men.

Now men cook as much as women, and many men chefs come across to the young boys on TV, many boys want to become professional chefs or cook meals for their beloved ones in the house. I think no more women cook more often than men.

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Traditionally, cooking is considered a women's job rather than a men's one. 
>> Traditionally, cooking is considered a woman's job rather than a man's job. 

From prehistoric times, work must have been divided according to gender. 
>> From prehistoric times, work has been divided according to gender. 

When men went out to hunt game, women who waited for men inside the cave might prepare for meals. 
>> When men went out to hunt, women, who were waiting for the men inside the cave, prepared meals. 

These role allocations may have been passed down by educating their children, and this division of roles has been gradually getting stronger and stronger as time goes by.
>> This is a good sentence.

This could be one of the explanations for why women cook more than men.
>> It could be one of the explanations why women cook more than men.

Now men cook as much as women, and many men chefs come across to the young boys on TV, many boys want to become professional chefs or cook meals for their beloved ones in the house. 
>> Now men cook as much as women, and many male chefs come across young boys on TV. Many boys want to become professional chefs or cook meals for their beloved ones in the house. 

I think no more women cook more often than men.
>> I think women no longer cook more often than men.
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