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What do you think are the characteristics of a good leader?

작성자: 황*하
2022-01-19 129

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It is one of the most difficult things to define what kind of qualifications needed to be a good leader. I have decided not to follow my boss's ways to control his juniors. It is well known that Korea is conservative country. Elderly has tried to preserve business manner which is unfair, unreasonable and high pressure. I believe that all societies has changed in a positive way as time goes by although it takes time.
I didn't want to be a leader like my seniors however, I can understand a little bit why my managers acted like that because I realize that a leader is not god so he/she can't be satisfied with all staffs. In my opinion, the basic requirement of leader is three things. Firstly, a leader has to love being lonely. It is almost impossible to be kind and be a manger who is superior in their duties because a leader is a decision maker. There always are people who complain about instructions from high positions. Secondly, they should be a good listener.

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Hi Hwang!^^ 

Defining a leader is actually hard. Nobody's perfect as they say. I agree with one of your answers, a leader should be a good listener. 
Nowadays, it's really hard to find a leader who listens to their employees. Though I understand the responsibility they have to the company they work for, I am actually hoping that they also show that they listen to their employees. I also like a leader who motivates their people. Motivating a person I guess is better than pressuring them to do better. 

Kudos to your answer! It's really great to read opinions coming from a person who is honest enough to share his ideas. 

Teacher Andrea 

It is one of the most difficult things to define what kind of qualifications needed to be a good leader.
>> One of the most difficult things to do is to define what ate the qualifications needed to be a good leader.  

 I have decided not to follow my boss's ways to control his juniors.
>> I have decided not to follow my boss' ways on how controls his juniors. 

 It is well known that Korea is conservative country. 
>> It is well known that Korea is a conservative country. 
 
Elderly has tried to preserve business manner which is unfair, unreasonable and high pressure. 
>> Elderlies tried to preserve business etiquettes which is unfair, unreasonable, with high pressure. 

I believe that all societies has changed in a positive way as time goes by although it takes time.
>>  I believe that all societies have positive changes as time goes by, although it takes time. 

I didn't want to be a leader like my seniors however, I can understand a little bit why my managers acted like that because I realize that a leader is not god so he/she can't be satisfied with all staffs. 
>> I don't want to become a leader like my seniors however, I understand a little bit on why my managers acted the way they do because a leader is not God so he/she can't be satisfied with all the staffs.  

In my opinion, the basic requirement of leader is three things. 
>> In my opinion, there are three basic requirement to be a good leader. 

Firstly, a leader has to love being lonely. 
>> First, a leader has to love being alone. 

It is almost impossible to be kind and be a manger who is superior in their duties because a leader is a decision maker. 
>> Correct  

There always are people who complain about instructions from high positions. 
>> Correct 

Secondly, they should be a good listener.
>> Second, they should be a good listener. 

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