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Do you think beauty is the same for every person?

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2022-01-18 583

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It is absolutely no. people have different standard about beauty. When I talked about beauty, it was totally different between me and my friends. A standard of beauty is made through a human's life. People have been living different life. It is so lucky for someone who doesn't looked cool. If beauty is the same for every people, only 10% people can get married.

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Hi, Hwanny! :)
Thank you for writing this insightful essay. 
I agree that the concept of beauty is different for every person. 
What's pretty for you might not be pretty for me. This is because we are all influenced by our culture and our society's standards. 
I'm glad that each of us has different perceptions when it comes to beauty. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. 
See you again in class tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry

It is absolutely no. 
>> It is absolutely not.
people have different standard about beauty. 
>> People have different standards about beauty.
When I talked about beauty, it was totally different between me and my friends. 
>> When I talked about beauty, my definition of it was totally different from that of my friends.
A standard of beauty is made through a human's life. 
>> The standard of beauty is made as we go through life. 
People have been living different life. 
>> People live different lives. 
It is so lucky for someone who doesn't looked cool. 
>> [Do You Mean]: Someone who tries not to act cool is a lucky person. 
If beauty is the same for every people, only 10% people can get married.
>> If beauty is the same for every person, only 10% of the population can get married.
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