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It was great traveling

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Hello, I'm Daniel. Today I will introduce our family's traveling.
-First Day
Our family waked up early.(We waked up 5:30)
Than We started going to jindo island.
(From Ilsan To Ji do island)
But We was driving 6Hours.
Jindo island was fantastic.
First We went to B2Floor to swim in the infinity pool. We played very fun.
Second We ate dinner and We went to B1F to play some games.
I think Our first day was perfect day.
I will say about my second day next time!
-To Be Countinue!!

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Hi, Daniel! I had fun reading your story about your family's trip. I hope to read more about your second day of your vacation. Thank you for writing this for me! Keep safe and see you in our class!

~T. Annie :)






Hello, I'm Daniel. 
>>Correct!
Today I will introduce our family's traveling.
>>Today I will tell you about our family's trip.
-First Day
Our family waked up early.(We waked up 5:30)
>>On the first day, my family and I woke up at 5:30 early in the morning.
Than We started going to jindo island.
>>Then We started going to jindo island.
(From Ilsan To Ji do island)
But We was driving 6Hours.
>> We drove from  Ilsan To Ji do island for six hours.
First We went to B2Floor to swim in the infinity pool. 
>>First, we went to B2Floor to swim in the infinity pool. 
We played very fun.
>>We had fun playing.
Second We ate dinner and We went to B1F to play some games.
>>Second, we ate dinner and we went to B1F to play some games.
I think Our first day was perfect day.
>>I think our first day was a perfect day.
I will say about my second day next time!
>>I will tell you about my second day next time!
-To Be Countinue!!
>>To be continued!!
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