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What special features do you think should be added to computers? Explain your answer.

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Computer is already perfect but I think cameras should be added to computers. When I took an online class, I could listen to my friends' sayings. They said that "I'm taking the classes with computer so, I can't turn on the camera". Through this sayings, I could think that the cameras should be added to computers. If the cameras are added to computers, clearly, many students will be able to participate well in the classes. Also, they will be able to take the classes effectively. I hope that my saying can be made come true.

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Hi Ann:) 

That's a great point. It would be less hassle if it had a camera on it. There are some other options as well like putting a webcam on it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Computer is already perfect but I think cameras should be added to computers. 
>> Computers are already perfect but I think there should be cameras added to it. 

When I took an online class, I could listen to my friends' sayings. 
>> When I take online classes, I can only hear what my friends are saying. 

They said that "I'm taking the classes with computer so, I can't turn on the camera". 
>> They always say that, "I'm taking the classes with a computer so, I can't turn on the camera". 

Through this sayings, I could think that the cameras should be added to computers. 
>> Through this, I could think that the cameras should be added to computers. 

If the cameras are added to computers, clearly, many students will be able to participate well in the classes. 
>> CORRECT

Also, they will be able to take the classes effectively. 
>> CORRECT

I hope that my saying can be made come true.
>> I hope what I am saying will come true. 
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