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How do you think can we encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine?

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Some people may think that we should encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine, but I'm not.
There are a lot of opinions about the vaccine, even though experts have the different opinions about it.
So we can't be sure about vaccine, so we can't make people to take the vaccine as a duty.
And every person has the different conditions about their body, so we have to think about those things.
In South Korea, only vaccinated people can go to some particular places.
But some people are rejecting it because this is one of the basic rights abuses.
So we can talk our own opinions about the vaccine, but we should respect others opinions.

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Hi John:) 

I think you are correct at some point. We have our right to choose whether to have it or not but there would always be consequences. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Some people may think that we should encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine, but I'm not.
>> Some people may think that we should encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine, but I don't. 

There are a lot of opinions about the vaccine, even though experts have the different opinions about it.
>> There are a lot of opinions about the vaccine, even though experts have different opinions about it.

So we can't be sure about vaccine, so we can't make people to take the vaccine as a duty.
>> So, we can be sure about it. This is the reason why we shouldn't take the vaccine as a duty. 

And every person has the different conditions about their body, so we have to think about those things.
>> Every person has different body conditions so we have to consider those things. 

In South Korea, only vaccinated people can go to some particular places.
>>CORRECT

But some people are rejecting it because this is one of the basic rights abuses.
>> Some people think that this is abuse to their rights. 

So we can talk our own opinions about the vaccine, but we should respect others opinions.
>>We can talk about regarding our opinions but we should respect other's as well. 
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