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I don't want to be a teacher.
That is because teachers need to do study more than students.
My second reason is teachers need to take care of the students.
My third reason is teachers need to one by one to answer the student's questions.
Finally, the teacher needs to stand for 2~3 hours.

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Hello, Joey!  You answered the question appropriately.  You did well in terms of spelling and word usage. 


- Teacher Debbie

I don't want to be a teacher.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because teachers need to do study more than students.
>> This is a good sentence.

My second reason is teachers need to take care of the students.
>> They also need to take care of them.

My third reason is teachers need to one by one to answer the student's questions.
>> Moreover, they need to answer their questions one by one.

Finally, the teacher needs to stand for 2~3 hours.
>> Finally, they need to stand for 2 to 3 hours.
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