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About peace!

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I would like to talk about factors that achieve peace or break peace.
There is peace when all of us cooperate and forgive.
However, there is no peace if there is division and discrimination.
I think freedom and peace are both important.
That is because freedom and peace must always coexist.

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Hi Eun Ha!
I think this is something that you are an authority on.
You expressed yourself really well.
Keep it up!
~~ Teacher Sharon
I would like to talk about factors that achieve peace or break peace.
>> I would like to talk about factors that promote peace or break the peace.
There is peace when all of us cooperate and forgive.
>> Correct
However, there is no peace if there is division and discrimination.
>> Correct
I think freedom and peace are both important.
>> Correct
That is because freedom and peace must always coexist.
>> Correct
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