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Writing Task (Jan 13th, 2022)

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1. If you could stop a bad habit that you have, what would you stop?
>>>I want to stop procrastinating what I really have to do today. I know it¡¯s a really bad habit, but I can¡¯t stop doing it. I know the fact that if I don¡¯t walk today, I have to run tomorrow! But it¡¯s not that easy to break the bad habit. However, since it¡¯s the first month of the year 2022, I¡¯m going to try to break that bad habit! That¡¯s what I want to teach my daughter. She won¡¯t learn from what I tell her. She will definitely learn from what I'm doing!

2. If you found a wallet with $1,000 in it, what would you do?
>>>I¡¯ll put that wallet in the postbox so that a mailman can return it to it¡¯s owner. I would definitely do as I said, because I want someone else who gets my lost wallet would do the same if I lost my wallet.

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Hello, U Seung! 

Wow! Great sentence construction and expressions! Keep it up! ^_^
Thank you for making time to answer the questions. 

Have a great day! 

~T. Roanne ^_^
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#Q1:
I want to stop procrastinating what I really have to do today. 
>> Correct! 
I know it¡¯s a really bad habit, but I can¡¯t stop doing it. 
>> Correct! 
I know the fact that if I don¡¯t walk today, I have to run tomorrow! 
>> Correct! 
But it¡¯s not that easy to break the bad habit. 
>> Correct! 
However, since it¡¯s the first month of the year 2022, I¡¯m going to try to break that bad habit! 
>> Correct! 
That¡¯s what I want to teach my daughter. 
>> Correct! 
She won¡¯t learn from what I tell her. 
>> Correct! 
She will definitely learn from what I'm doing!
>> Correct! 

#Q2:
I¡¯ll put that wallet in the postbox so that a mailman can return it to it¡¯s owner. 
>> I¡¯ll put that wallet in the post-box so that a mailman can return it to its owner. 
I would definitely do as I said, because I want someone else who gets my lost wallet would do the same if I lost my wallet.
>> Correct! 
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