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Do men typically drink more than women in your country? Why do you think that is?

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I think that men drink more than women in my country. Women normally go to a cafe when they meet friends. It is important for women to chat or communicate each other and like to know each other through talking about. The other hands, men think more important to do together. However, there aren't a lot of activities that we can do together in Korea. So, most men start to meet drinking beer. It is first step of men's meeting. Naturally, To drink alcohol became a Korea culture especially for men.

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Hi Luel! 
Thanks for doing your homework. 
Have a beer then tonight :) 

I think that men drink more than women in my country. 
>>> CORRECT! 
Women normally go to a cafe when they meet friends. 
>>> CORRECT!
It is important for women to chat or communicate each other and like to know each other through talking about. 
>>> It is important for women to chat or communicate and to know each other. 
The other hands, men think more important to do together. 
>>> On the other hand, men consider being together as important. 
However, there aren't a lot of activities that we can do together in Korea. 
>>> CORRECT!
So, most men start to meet drinking beer. 
>>> So, most men meet and drink beer. 
It is first step of men's meeting. 
>>> It's the first step when they first meet. 
Naturally, To drink alcohol became a Korea culture especially for men.
>>> Drinking has become naturally part of the Korean culture, especially for men. 
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