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Essay (Jan 11th, 2022)

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What are the possible benefits of working on weekends?

There are just two benefits. No more than. Just two.
First, I would get paid more than when I don¡¯t do extra hours of working on weekends.
Second, No need to worry about the next monday¡¯s work! Because I¡¯ve done the work that I am supposed to do on the next monday already, which means, I would start the first day of the week with less pressure of work.

But there are so much more benefits if I don't¡¯ work on weekends. So if I have to do work on weekends, I prefer to do before 9 am. Actually, I ve been working from 6 to 9 am on weekends so that I could get home before my daughter wakes up(9:30). My wife and my daughter are the reason why I¡¯m still alive for

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Hello, U Seung!

Oh, that is so sweet of you! Your family appreciates your effort in always making time for them. Your daughter is growing up in a loving and caring family. That is really wonderful! ^_^

Well, you are actually right, but working on weekends means less time for yourself and your family. So, it's really best that we don't work on weekends. We should always balance work and personal life.

Thank you for sharing and have a great day ahead! 

~T. Roanne ^_^

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There are just two benefits. No more than. Just two.
>> Correct! 
First, I would get paid more than when I don¡¯t do extra hours of working on weekends.
>> Correct! 
Second, No need to worry about the next monday¡¯s work! Because I¡¯ve done the work that I am supposed to do on the next monday already, which means, I would start the first day of the week with less pressure of work.
>> Second, No need to worry about the next Monday¡¯s work! Because I¡¯ve done the work that I am supposed to do on the next Monday already, which means, I would start the first day of the week with less pressure of work.
But there are so much more benefits if I don't¡¯ work on weekends. 
>> But there is so much benefit if I don't work on weekends. 
So if I have to do work on weekends, I prefer to do before 9 am. 
>> Correct! 
Actually, I ve been working from 6 to 9 am on weekends so that I could get home before my daughter wakes up(9:30). 
>> Actually, I've been working from 6 to 9 am on weekends, so that I could get home before my daughter wakes up at 9:30am. 
My wife and my daughter are the reason why I¡¯m still alive for
>> My wife and my daughter are the reason why I¡¯m still alive for.
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