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My famous park is named lake park.
The lake park is very large.
And, it has Cultural Heritage.
Third, it has so many roads to go there.
Finally, the lake park is very large.

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Hello, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework.   Please take note of the corrections to help you improve.


- Teacher Debbie

My famous park is named lake park.
>> One of the famous parks in Korea is named Lake Park.

The lake park is very large.
>> It is huge.

And, it has Cultural Heritage.
>> It is a cultural heritage.

Third, it has so many roads to go there.
>> There are so many roads leading to that park. 

Finally, the lake park is very large.
>> You have already mentioned this.
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