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If you can invent something, what would it be?

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If you can invent something, what would it be?

If I can invent something, I would make teleport.
If possible, I don't need to go to work by subway.
Also, I can save time a commuting hour. I can travel abroad in a short time.
It is fun to imagine, but it's probably impossible.

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Hi Monica:) 

I would be glad to invest to your idea. It looks promising.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can invent something, I would make teleport.
>> If I can invent something, I would make teleportation machine. 

If possible, I don't need to go to work by subway.
>> CORRECT

Also, I can save time a commuting hour. 
>> Also, I can save an hour worth of commuting time.

I can travel abroad in a short time.
>> I can travel abroad in a short period of time.

It is fun to imagine, but it's probably impossible.
>> CORRECT
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