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I can enjoy these five food in winter!

작성자: 성*영
2022-01-06 143

회원님의 영작문

In our country there were many food we enjoy in winter. Among them, I would like to say kimchi, a fish-shaped bun, Red bean porridge, rice-cake soup, tangerine.
Kimchi is traditional Korean food. it is spicy and it has various kind of tasty to other city. By eating kimchi, we can take care of our healthy during winter. Fish-shaped bun is my favorite winter food. It is a food of road. All people in our country enjoy this food in winter. Red bean porridge is representative food of dongji. In dongji, If we eat red bean porridge, this will bring luck to us. It is our superstition. Rice-cake soup is representative food of Korean New Year’s Day. When we eat this food, we can get the one year older. Tangerine is essential when I watch the TV under the electric pad. By this way, I’m very comfortable and satisfaction.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sally!^^ 

We only have two seasons in our country. Dry season and we season however, from the month of June to September, it is the rainy season. In our family, we usually prepare macaroni soup and sweet chocolate rice porridge. From December to February, though it's no longer raining, our temperature will drop to 9 degrees Celsius. January is actually the coldest month. Rice is our main food so we always prepare viands with soup. We have pork sour stew, tinola ( no english name but it's chicken soup), and beef stew.

Home cook food is always my comfort food!^^ 

Teacher Andrea 

In our country there were many food we enjoy in winter. 
>> In our country, there are various food we enjoy during winter. 

Among them, I would like to say kimchi, a fish-shaped bun, Red bean porridge, rice-cake soup, tangerine.
>> Among them, I would like to say kimchi, a fish-shaped bun, red bean porridge, rice-cake soup, and tangerine are on my list. 

Kimchi is traditional Korean food. 
>> Kimchi is a traditional Korean food. 

it is spicy and it has various kind of tasty to other city. 
>> It is spicy and has various kind of taste from different cities. 

By eating kimchi, we can take care of our healthy during winter. 
>> By eating kimchi, we can take care of our health during winter. 
>> OR: By eating kimchi, we can still be healthy during winter. 

Fish-shaped bun is my favorite winter food. 
>> Correct 

It is a food of road. 
>> It is  a food for road trip. 

All people in our country enjoy this food in winter. 
>> Correct 

Red bean porridge is representative food of dongji. 
>> Red bean porridge is a food that represents dongji.  

In dongji, If we eat red bean porridge, this will bring luck to us. It is our superstition. 
>> Eating red bean porridge during donji will bring good luck which is a superstitious belief.  

Rice-cake soup is representative food of Korean New Year’s Day.
>> Rice cake soup is food which is served during New Year's Day. 

When we eat this food, we can get the one year older. 
>> Correct 

Tangerine is essential when I watch the TV under the electric pad. 
>> Tangerine is essential when I watch TV under the electric pad.

By this way, I’m very comfortable and satisfaction. 
>> By this way, I am very comfortable and satisfied.

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