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The value of friendship

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Humans are social animals. Since we born, we meet numerous people such as family, friends, lover , co-workers, etc.
Among them, it is no exaggeration to say that friends have the most influence on individual values. When we was in school, we can learn how to live and communicate with other people through friends in school which is a kind of small society. In addition, most of friends are same age group with me so I can tell my concerns or any talks which even I can't tell to my parents. Finally, when I have a big problem in my life, friends will help and comfort me.

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Hi, James! Thanks for sharing your overview about the value of friendship. I admire you on how you value your friends this much. They must be  proud of you then. I wish I have a friend like you. I appreciate you for writing this essay. Keep it up! See you later.

~T. Annie




Humans are social animals.
>>Correct!
 Since we born, we meet numerous people such as family, friends, lover , co-workers, etc.
>>Since we were born, we meet numerous people such as family, friends, lovers , co-workers, and etc.
Among them, it is no exaggeration to say that friends have the most influence on individual values.
>>Among them, it is not an exaggeration to say that friends have the most influence on individual values.
 When we was in school, we can learn how to live and communicate with other people through friends in school which is a kind of small society.
>>  When we were in school, we could learn how to live and communicate with other people through friends which is a kind of small society.
In addition, most of friends are same age group with me so I can tell my concerns or any talks which even I can't tell to my parents. 
>>In addition, most of my friends are my age so I can tell them my concerns or discuss any topics which I can't tell my parents.
Finally, when I have a big problem in my life, friends will help and comfort me.
>>Finally, when I'm in trouble , they  help and comfort me.
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