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The most gratefulthing ion this christmas is that i could watch Spiderman No Way Home on Christmas. I really want to watxh it but I didn¡¯t have time to watch,but christmas gave me time for watch it,

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Hi Alex:) 

I am also looking forward to watch that! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The most gratefulthing ion this christmas is that i could watch Spiderman No Way Home on Christmas. 
>> This Christmas, I am most grateful for watching "Spiderman: No Way Home". 

I really want to watxh it but I didn¡¯t have time to watch,but christmas gave me time for watch it,
>> I really want to watch it because I didn't have that much time to watch. Fortunately, I had some time on Christmas. 
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