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Even I don't think Christmas day is not just mean a religious ceremony.

Jesus is a saint and good leader to all of us.
It's good we have chance to celebrate and enjoy together on Christmas.
Specially Christmas esason is the end of the year.
We give and take samall gifts of thanks as the tear goes by.
I thank that it's good for people having parties and talking with families.

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Hi Ms. Lily! Thank you for sharing this. Have a merry Christmas with your family and friends :)
Aki~~
Even I don't think Christmas day is not just mean a religious ceremony.
>>> Even I,  don't consider that Christmas does not only mean a religious ceremony.
Jesus is a saint and good leader to all of us.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>  Jesus is a good example of living a righteous life and leadership for all of us.
It's good we have chance to celebrate and enjoy together on Christmas.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> It feels great to get a chance of having this celebration with our families on Christmas day.
Specially Christmas esason is the end of the year.
>>>Especially Christmas season is in the end of the year.
We give and take samall gifts of thanks as the tear goes by.
>>> We give and take small gifts of thanksgiving for the year the passed by.
I thank that it's good for people having parties and talking with families.
>>> I think that it's good for people to have parties and talking with their families.
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