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What is the best memory you have in school? Explain in detail.

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It is not the memory in my school but I've been to the park where is near by my house with my school classmates.
I was a fifth grade of elementary school student, and I had many friends bacause it was before Covid19.
Before then, I have been many places with my friends but the one is the most memorable memory with my friends.

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Hi John  :) 

That sounds like an interesting memory. I hope you can make more with your friends in the future. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

It is not the memory in my school but I've been to the park where is near by my house with my school classmates.
>> It is not a memory that we had in school but I was at the park at that time, nearby my house, with my school classmates. 

I was a fifth grade of elementary school student, and I had many friends bacause it was before Covid19.
>> I was a 5th grade student in elementary and I had many friends before the pandemic. 

Before then, I have been many places with my friends but the one is the most memorable memory with my friends.
>>Before then, I have been to many places with my friends but that one is the most memorable memory with my friends.

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